Solid Detergent Newsletter - $250 - Dec. 1

[Coy]

I'll be leaving for the holiday in about 30 minutes and won't be able to make any revisions till monday. Enjoy your Thanksgiving.

[Jopicasso]

Hi,
Here is my 1st entry,

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...soap-buddy.jpg

unfortunately including brushes in the sink looked too busy and un-familiar, so I preferred not to include it, I also aimed to give a "bar" feeling within the background

Please let me know if I am missing any data

thank you

[afeig324]

Hi,
Here is my 1st entry,

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...soap-buddy.jpg

unfortunately including brushes in the sink looked too busy and un-familiar, so I preferred not to include it, I also aimed to give a "bar" feeling within the background

Please let me know if I am missing any data

thank you

Hi Jopicasso,

I like your angle a lot! Here are some suggestions:

The water flowing out of the product along with inside the sink looks way too clean. See if you can make it look more sudsy.

Also, on top of the product, there are several small holes around the perimeter. This is where the soapy water flows out from, so that should be more visible.

I like the wine glass, but rather than showing a full glass, I would rather see clean shining glasses coming out of the sink or to the side of it.

Keep going!

Thanks!

[afeig324]

OK here are some changes.
V2
http://i369.photobucket.com/albums/o...oapBuddyV2.jpg

Hey Coy,

I think the bubbles just floating around are unnecessary. I like the bubbles that you have in the sink and on the product.

The text at the top is covering the sink and the water flowing. See if there is anyway rearrange so that the process of using the product is clearly visible.

I am unsure whether I like the brushes or not. Keep them in for now. I may decide to remove them once everything else is set.

Thanks!!

[Coy]

Thanks for the feedback here is less bubbles and reworked the text to show more of the Process.
http://i369.photobucket.com/albums/o...pBuddyv2-1.jpg

[Jopicasso]

Hi Jopicasso,

I like your angle a lot! Here are some suggestions:

The water flowing out of the product along with inside the sink looks way too clean. See if you can make it look more sudsy.

Also, on top of the product, there are several small holes around the perimeter. This is where the soapy water flows out from, so that should be more visible.

I like the wine glass, but rather than showing a full glass, I would rather see clean shining glasses coming out of the sink or to the side of it.

Keep going!

Thanks!

thank you
here's the revision as requested:

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oapbuddyv2.jpg

[afeig324]

thank you
here's the revision as requested:

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oapbuddyv2.jpg

I really like your design overall! There is just something missing around the sink area...

Is it possible to make the sink area look more like a bar scene? Maybe add some liquor bottles on shelves. The bottles should not be too detailed because I dont want to distract away from the product.

Also, to the right on the sink, can you display bar glasses clean and SPARKLING. I really want to convey the idea of clean sparkling glasses.

[Jopicasso]

I really like your design overall! There is just something missing around the sink area...

Is it possible to make the sink area look more like a bar scene? Maybe add some liquor bottles on shelves. The bottles should not be too detailed because I dont want to distract away from the product.

Also, to the right on the sink, can you display bar glasses clean and SPARKLING. I really want to convey the idea of clean sparkling glasses.

I am glad u like it!
please check here the updates as requested and tell me what u think about it

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oqpbuddyv3.jpg

thank you!

[afeig324]

I am glad u like it!
please check here the updates as requested and tell me what u think about it

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oqpbuddyv3.jpg

thank you!

I have one critical issue:

The sink displayed is a single sink, found in most homes. This newsletter is geared toward bars. Therefore, the sink should be a 3-compartment sink. This link shows a picture of what it looks like: http://www.restaurant-services.com/i...k3-Tub-NSF.JPG

Please see if you can adapt your drawing to include the other compartments. You may have to change it to landscape view

Also, in the bubble saying "lasts longer than 2 gallons..." can you change that too: "One 16oz Soap Buddy Lasts Longer than 2 GALLONS of Liquid Detergent!!"

[Jopicasso]

I have one critical issue:

The sink displayed is a single sink, found in most homes. This newsletter is geared toward bars. Therefore, the sink should be a 3-compartment sink. This link shows a picture of what it looks like: http://www.restaurant-services.com/i...k3-Tub-NSF.JPG

Please see if you can adapt your drawing to include the other compartments. You may have to change it to landscape view

Also, in the bubble saying "lasts longer than 2 gallons..." can you change that too: "One 16oz Soap Buddy Lasts Longer than 2 GALLONS of Liquid Detergent!!"

wow! is this sink change essential? because it will push me to do a new design all over again, I wish you had mentioned this from the beginning

[afeig324]

wow! is this sink change essential? because it will push me to do a new design all over again, I wish you had mentioned this from the beginning

hmm....i definately dont want you to do it all over again!

what about keeping everything the same, but to the left and right of the sink, add a compartment. It is not necessary to see the entire 3 compartment as long as the viewer can see most of it. There is definately enough counterspace to add the sinks.

If you have to eliminate the wine bottle and the clean glasses, thats ok. Just put the clean glasses back into the sink, to the right of the product.

Would that make it a lot easier??

[Jopicasso]

hmm....i definately dont want you to do it all over again!

what about keeping everything the same, but to the left and right of the sink, add a compartment. It is not necessary to see the entire 3 compartment as long as the viewer can see most of it. There is definately enough counterspace to add the sinks.

If you have to eliminate the wine bottle and the clean glasses, thats ok. Just put the clean glasses back into the sink, to the right of the product.

Would that make it a lot easier??

sure this is easier, thanks for understanding, I will be working on the changes

[afeig324]

sure this is easier, thanks for understanding, I will be working on the changes

Thanks, and sorry for the late change!

[Jopicasso]

Thanks, and sorry for the late change!

No worries!

here you go, hope I got you correctly:

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oapbuddyv5.jpg

[afeig324]

No worries!

here you go, hope I got you correctly:

http://i636.photobucket.com/albums/u...oapbuddyv5.jpg

Ok! I have a few more MINOR changes to make with the text and then I think we have a winner!

--Where it says "SOAP BUDDY Cleans:" Please change to "Solid SOAP BUDDY Cleans:"

--Under that, change "Refrigerators" to "Refrigeration"

--In the bubble, with the "Lasts Longer than...." at the end, add in "and Costs 1/2 as Much"

--Also, the text in the bubble, should stand out much more. The black text on blue bubble, does not catch your attention.

--The bullets on the bottom, please add one more benefit and put it first on the list: "Removes Lipstick & Grease"

--Finally, instead of the website at the bottom, put the following text "Call 1-800-MIX-SOAP to Order Directly From the Soap Factory"

Once those changes are made, I think we are all set!

Congrats!!

[afeig324]

Thanks Coy. I thought you did a great job, but in the end I think Jopicasso's design stood out more.

[Jopicasso]

Ok! I have a few more MINOR changes to make with the text and then I think we have a winner!

--Where it says "SOAP BUDDY Cleans:" Please change to "Solid SOAP BUDDY Cleans:"

--Under that, change "Refrigerators" to "Refrigeration"

--In the bubble, with the "Lasts Longer than...." at the end, add in "and Costs 1/2 as Much"

--Also, the text in the bubble, should stand out much more. The black text on blue bubble, does not catch your attention.

--The bullets on the bottom, please add one more benefit and put it first on the list: "Removes Lipstick & Grease"

--Finally, instead of the website at the bottom, put the following text "Call 1-800-MIX-SOAP to Order Directly From the Soap Factory"

Once those changes are made, I think we are all set!

Congrats!!

thank you so much, I will submit the changes within a couple of hours

[Jopicasso]

could u tell me what's the final file format you will need for the file?

right now I am working from another computer and unfortunately, I don't have the fonts here , I will submit the design just once I get the font here
thanks again

[afeig324]

could u tell me what's the final file format you will need for the file?

right now I am working from another computer and unfortunately, I don't have the fonts here , I will submit the design just once I get the font here
thanks again

Adobe Illustrator CS3

[Jopicasso]

Adobe Illustrator CS3

OK Perfect