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#1 Waterlogged

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 02:43 PM

Let me know what you guys think I am still trying this Hydrant snorkel site. (I wont give up LOL)

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http://www.mthoodhosting.com/1.jpg

of course it isnt done just a beginning to a layout
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#2 Shyflower

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 04:50 PM

I can see what you're going for and I like the big graphic element. However, I think you would be better off painting some of the color back into the hydrant. I had to look at it a minute before I made the connection.

You have some kind of smear going on up top in the red. I don't know what it is, but it looks like a paint blob. I'd also get rid of the outlines on the text. They aren't black, they aren't red, they aren't silver... looks like a mixture of all three. No outline will make the silver stand out better I think.

#3 Waterlogged

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 08:32 PM

You would understand if there was a picture of what a hydrant snorkel is. That paint smear is actualy the outline of the left side of a hydrant and the grey 'pipe' comming off the left side is the snorkel itself but it looked better in a different format I will see if I can save it as just a logo.

I will add some color back into the hydrant I was thinking the whole thing looked too dull.

Thanks for the comments.

-Adam
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#4 Neupix

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 08:49 PM

First, who is your target audience? Firefighters?

Second, I wouldn't recommend using a photo as a background - I don't think it looks good. In all honesty, the only time I ever see a photo used that way is in a free geocities website (you know when people use large photos as tiled backgrounds).

I really think you should create something simpler. Find one or two key elements you want to include, and work around them. Use a discreet background colour, make a basic layout, develop a good logo, and then work around that.
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#5 Waterlogged

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 08:50 PM

how about now? I darkened the outlines so they are black. let me know what you think
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#6 Waterlogged

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 08:52 PM

As for a logo I already admitted I am not a great designer but I did this one http://www.mthoodhosting.com/logo2.jpg

Its also not complete
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#7 Shyflower

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 09:02 PM

First, who is your target audience? Firefighters?

Second, I wouldn't recommend using a photo as a background - I don't think it looks good. In all honesty, the only time I ever see a photo used that way is in a free geocities website (you know when people use large photos as tiled backgrounds).

I really think you should create something simpler. Find one or two key elements you want to include, and work around them. Use a discreet background colour, make a basic layout, develop a good logo, and then work around that.


I wasn't looking at waterlog's page as a home page. It appeared to be more of an "entrance" page. If I'm wrong, then I agree with Penguin. There is really no place for text on the page.

I think as an entrance page the graphic works except for the fact that you have to make the connection that the orange and silver thing is a fire hydrant.

I am still not liking the outlines though. There is less of a blur/smear thing there, but it is still there and makes the page look sloppy. I think what's happening is that the underlying red is bleeding through. If you are determined to keep the outlines, then I would make a white copy of the text and layer it behind the silver text. This will help control the bleed, or at least it does in the program I use. (don't know about Adobe... I don't use it)

By the way, I think the logo looks good on its own.

#8 Waterlogged

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Posted 12 June 2004 - 09:05 PM

You mean I did something right on the logo LOL :-)
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#9 psyris

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Posted 22 June 2004 - 01:31 PM

this is going from the first link that u placed in ur entrace post but yeah, i not all that rapped but im not one whos opinion counts as i still havernt redone my site and still has a shit 5 minute thing i made up so everyones not looking at a blank screen. though still it aint i site that gives me impressions. though all the best with its development
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#10 bigyou

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Posted 22 June 2004 - 05:38 PM

Since you said this was the beginning of a layout, then I'll say you should keep working on it.

As said above, I'm not sure about the picture as a background. Maybe use it in a header but no more. Because I'm trying to figure out where you will put text, but I can't seem to find some place.

And I think your logo is a little bit too much complicated and not clear enough. I wasn't able to find out what it was quickly. The essence is there, but it still IMO needs work.

You may want to work around the curves that are currently present in you interface. They may be a good starting point.

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