Should I skip my periods

I designed this brooklyn irish piece, adding punctuation so that it could be read as I meant to say it. Now, when I look at it, I suspect that the two periods are weakening the overall effect, instead of strengthening it. But this is one of those times where I could go either way. I would appreciate your comments on whether or not I should skip the periods.

Thank you,

b o n o j e r r y

Hi, jbono.

Given the intention of the periods, they do make a big difference. I'm wondering if there's a way to visually unify these so they're more cohesive and readily visible, especially where the periods are concerned. The gradient on Irish kind of washes out the period, at least on this monitor, so I'm wondering how it would look if there was no gradient, and only Brooklyn was in the r/w/b so that the two Irish had the same period and look. Or, if the r/w/b pattern had blend into part of the second Irish, but Irish ending in same color and same period as first Irish? Er sumpin. The periods do make the emphasis pop, though.

That is great feedback, scritch. Thank you. I will explore these ideas.

Well, if you're not so sure about the periods, perhaps you could remove them and maybe put "Brooklyn Irish" in parenthesis, maybe italicized.

Also, have you considered (or tried) the possibility of making the "Brooklyn Irish" section as a Red/White/Blue gradient instead of flat colors? Might make the top part be a little more consistent with the bottom part.

Just a couple of ideas, though. I'm loving the Irish font!

I see what you mean -- the periods seem necessary yet are definitely a draw on the eye and awkward in balance. Try different layouts -- like maybe separating the word "Irish" from "Brooklyn Irish" a little more and punctuating it differently. Like:

Irish
[Brooklyn Irish]

or

Irish!
Brooklyn Irish

or some way that implies the first word is a statement about the person without usual punctuation:

->Irish<-
BROOKLYN Irish

Hope this helps!