would really appreciate you comments & suggestions!
Oral Health Brochure
I designed a tri-fold brochure for a client of mine and they really like it so far, but they want something...
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INFIN8
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Posted 11 September 2006 - 07:27 PM
I designed a tri-fold brochure for a client of mine and they really like it so far, but they want something really attention grabbing for the front flap of the brochure, and I've tried a few things, but nothing seems to really stand out...
would really appreciate you comments & suggestions!
would really appreciate you comments & suggestions!
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Posted 11 September 2006 - 10:27 PM
Hi infin8,
I like the design, the flow of the entire look, still one remark to do: getrid of the black used in fonts, and better find a font color to match the etire design.
The bar used to point "An estimated ..." is out of order...i mean in the whole composition you don't have eben one tone to match that violet. A simple square near or above "An estimated..." should do it.
Though i am not very found of the shape used(with clouds inside) i have to remark that this brochure is fine looking...but opened.Beeing closed the effect might loose so that's a good point to start thinking to rearange somehow at least 2 of the folds's text so that the reader should read with the entire tri-fold open.
Otherwise i like the color tones.
I give mi highest on crops you have made and the color match!
Best regards,
Emi
I like the design, the flow of the entire look, still one remark to do: getrid of the black used in fonts, and better find a font color to match the etire design.
The bar used to point "An estimated ..." is out of order...i mean in the whole composition you don't have eben one tone to match that violet. A simple square near or above "An estimated..." should do it.
Though i am not very found of the shape used(with clouds inside) i have to remark that this brochure is fine looking...but opened.Beeing closed the effect might loose so that's a good point to start thinking to rearange somehow at least 2 of the folds's text so that the reader should read with the entire tri-fold open.
Otherwise i like the color tones.I give mi highest on crops you have made and the color match!
Best regards,
Emi
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Posted 25 October 2006 - 01:37 PM
This is really nice, I love the flowing sky shape! I agree with the comment on that violet/dark red-ish colored bar, the only other place I see this is is in the text and logo on the front. Maybe the orange color you used for the text would be more appropriate.
While I think the black looks fine for body text, you bring it a bit too close to the edges in some areas (see top picture, left panel, two lower paragraphs). Stick with the margins you used for the bottom paragraph on the "Functional Orthodontics" panel. Lighten up the leading a little, and you've got a great piece!
While I think the black looks fine for body text, you bring it a bit too close to the edges in some areas (see top picture, left panel, two lower paragraphs). Stick with the margins you used for the bottom paragraph on the "Functional Orthodontics" panel. Lighten up the leading a little, and you've got a great piece!
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Posted 07 January 2007 - 02:49 AM
In addition to some things that have already been covered, I think you need to work on the front page type. When the piece is open it looks super, but if you look at just the front panel there is nothing that makes you want to pick up the brochure. You could try using the style of the headlines you've used with the website subtitles. Use the word "see" as your headline and the rest of the phrase could go smaller underneath.
You might also want to decrease the point size of your body text as it seems you've crowded your borders.
Does the company logo have to go on the front? If you could put it on the back panel or something it would give you more space to play with something eyecatching.
I think this will turn out great!
You might also want to decrease the point size of your body text as it seems you've crowded your borders.
Does the company logo have to go on the front? If you could put it on the back panel or something it would give you more space to play with something eyecatching.
I think this will turn out great!
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Posted 07 January 2007 - 02:16 PM
wow man thts amazing!!!!!!!lol i say tht cuz i once made a brochure for my phsd and if u compare to this...lol...it was soo horrible:S....lol i love wht you've done with the swiwel tht runs through all the pages and how the girl in the middl ehas her hands over it...very nice!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted 07 January 2007 - 04:58 PM
yikes, this thread keeps coming back from the dead! 
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Posted 16 January 2007 - 01:57 AM
yikes, this thread keeps coming back from the dead!
yeah, I was suprised to see this one again! So many good recommendations! I actually ended up changing some things slightly, based on some of the above comments...
The end product looked even better printed! Client was very happy!! In case anyone's interested, I'll post the final version when I get a chance.
Thanks everyone!
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Posted 03 March 2007 - 01:48 PM
I think you can come up with a better headline. Right now it looks like an ad for colored contact lenses. I reserve script for wedding invitations, but that’s me. The clouds relate to dreams and sleep and breathing clearly. Perhaps front wave is color instead of clouds.
How about a messy bed caused by a sleepless night.
Maybe a photo of a tight close up of an oral apparatus. The color and symmetry have to be totally awesome or it will scare people. I see the word smile centered (in a delicate script) on the top teeth.
How about a messy bed caused by a sleepless night.
Maybe a photo of a tight close up of an oral apparatus. The color and symmetry have to be totally awesome or it will scare people. I see the word smile centered (in a delicate script) on the top teeth.
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Posted 23 April 2007 - 09:30 PM
The back of the piece looks very different from the front. I'd work on the fonts -- especially the front flap which looks very cut and paste. The font on that front flap is all wrong even though it matches other fonts -- it needs to work with that graphic. The graphics are really nice -- very eye-catching and crisp and attractive! Can you make them larger?? So that the face fills the front flap more? I know that means fiddling around with text. Otherwise it's REALLY great. Nice work!
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Posted 25 April 2007 - 09:32 PM
ACK, you just gave me flashbacks, i used to work at a dental insurance company designing these things all day long =) looks really good tho, high quality. Id just suggest on the cover the sky picture with the eyes, too focused on her eyes, should be used in a vision brochure, id come back a big and show her whole face, not just her mouth cause you have that already on the back side. I get that you put that there because of the "See what were all about" heading, but again thats goin in a vision direction, Id go a different route on that. Good job!
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Posted 25 May 2007 - 05:43 PM
I kinda disagree about the text colors, I like what you did -- the orange compliments the blue and makes it look friendly -- it's certainly not important that you keep the illusion of text being on the same "level". What that seems to be happening, just make sure that the stuff you want to "pop" is in fact popping and that the readers eyes aren't being too taxed by complimentary colors too close together making the 3-D effect irritating to look at.
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Posted 26 May 2007 - 08:07 AM
It was one of the first things i learned to place the sentences at the same height. In holland we call this a stramien...looks like this:
http://www.huisartse...enpost2.jpg.jpg
http://www.huisartse...enpost2.jpg.jpg
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Posted 26 May 2007 - 09:27 AM
Oh! I thought you meant the 3-D effect because your note mentioned the colors and it looked like you were making a comment about the colors popping... nevermind!
I DO completely agree that sentences should be at the same levels across the page whenever possible.
Thanks for clearing that up, Beaude!
I DO completely agree that sentences should be at the same levels across the page whenever possible.
Thanks for clearing that up, Beaude!
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Posted 14 June 2007 - 04:18 AM
Infin8,
Awesome job! flows together real well! Keep up the good work!
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Awesome job! flows together real well! Keep up the good work!
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